Update 9: Missing
November 19, 2013 12:00 am
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This is our introduction to the face of “The Man,” in Captain Harold Reis. If you’d like more info on this guy, he can be found in the Cast page.
It didn’t occur to me until after we decided to enter the coloring phase that Shaw and Harris could have matching jackets. After we talked about this, it dawned on me that they could have a kind of informal “uniform” on board, pairing a white tank-top and a tan jacket. If you add that dimension to the story, you’ll find an interesting character detail about everyone on board.
With Harris and Shaw, they’re the oldest members of The Binturong crew, and they’ve been friends for decades. They’re wearing the jackets. In Chen’s case, he’s got the jacket somewhere in his “command center,” but it gets warm in there. With Avery, I wanted her to have a totally different outfit, because she doesn’t like the formality of uniforms. You’ll see why that’s important as we proceed.
Also, don’t forget to check out the eye candy in Panel 1 before you go.
Interesting start.
The experience & talent of your artistic team seems to radiate from my screen.
I really appreciate art styles that make every line count. Raw, yet elegant.
Character expression and chemistry feels alive.
Story setting and telling is solid. You caught me with the first three pages.
In stead of dissecting those first 9 pages, discussing every detail, I’ll just leave it at these three notes:
1) That first page is perfect… EXCEPT (;)) you didn’t name both your brave engineers. One guy is Shaw, and the other…?
2)Don’t spoiler stuff in your descriptions! *cough*page2*cough* I like the extra info, but I’d love it if it was shown in the comic in stead of you telling me that woman is not the average ‘corporate-corrupted-government symbiote’. (though I do realize you probably have most of the first few chapters plotted out in detail already, I found this quite ‘glaring’ for a page 2 revelation)
3)You seem to have misplaced or hidden your RSS feed *hint hint*
I’ll enjoy Free Mars and Cookbook of the Gods, didn’t know those… so much internet and so little time :).
Ort, first up: thanks for coming! I’m glad you stopped in, checked the archive, and took the time to comment. That’s awesome!
I appreciate the crit; there are some good notes in there. And of course, anybody who checks out Kirby is a friend of mine 😉
Another great page! I love the posters in the background of panel 1. Clearly Harris and Shaw each put a poster that they liked and Sam came along with one of her own. Very cool, and it really makes the world feel lived in. These guys have a history and familiarity with one another something that I hope we get learn more about!
The jacket note is really great, I like that sort of love and care that goes into this strip. Also, I really appreciate how you balance the tech Harris’s ship compared with hologram (not sure what to call it) that Sato has. It’s a really great mix!
I think hologram is a good word to use. It’s certainly what I use in my script 😉 Thanks for looking through all the details. These pages have so much going on, and I hope people can both step back and take in the art with Pedro’s colors, but also really dig into Nic’s pencils and details.
I can totally see Avery putting up a poster of some nice chiseled abs 😉
There’s a real sense of friction between these two crews that I’m loving. Like how they’re completely divided in the top panel along with the dialog throughout this page. And there’s this great formal vs. casual feel to divide them even further.
Oh Chen, you do have a way with words.
Thank you for noticing! I wrote it with that in mind, but Nic really illustrated that separation. That first panel really sends the idea home that we have two very different groups, here.
Oh! That’s a great point about the friction in panel 1, the composition, balloon layout, and dialog in that panel really makes it work.
I agree Chen does have a way with words, I also think that he is super fun!
Chen’s got some great moments coming up. 😉